I have a few thoughts. Some have been touched on by previous posters but I will reiterate anyway and, obviously, some are on the subjective side so you can take them or leave them.:
-Lose the hit counter and the Made on a
Mac logo. While the later is sort of obvious since it looks like something produced by iWeb, it still does nothing for your site to have it there and it detracts from a professional presentation.
-I would make the words "
Lighting Designer" smaller than your name on the front
page.
-Lose the picture of the
Express from your "Shows"
page. Why is it there to begin with?
-On "Shows" the size of the type used for each show changes part of the way down. Little problems like this really subtract from the design of a site.
-For each show, list not only the title,
venue and your position but also include the director, the designer if it was someone other than you (which it is in some cases), and the year the show took place. I might include the number of performances that took place if it is more than a few in most cases but that is up for discussion.
-I would make the type size larger for the title of each show and smaller for the other text. Maybe italicize or do something to make your
role standout.
-It does not appear that there is any rhyme or reason to the order in which you present shows. Consider creating one. Most recent to oldest or most important to least important are two possibilities.
-"This is a list of all of the shows and productions I have been a part of." should be "This is a list of all of the shows and productions of which I have been a part." Don't end a sentence with a preposition. Grammar is important. Also, in your mind, what is the difference between a show and a production?
-The opening
line for the
page "Lighting Design Photos" has similarly poor grammar. Don't include shows on which you served in a non-creative capacity. Lose the sentence about Peter Pan and 13 and then lose the albums of pictures for them.
-No one is going to choose you for a show based on your love of gadget blogs and Apple. I too love gadget blogs and apple. So do millions of other people. Same goes for YouTube. Unless you favorite links are lighting related, don't include them. Actually, just don't include them. Put them on your Facebook instead.
-Get someone to take a
headshot of you where we can see your head. If you don't want to show your
face, don't include a picture of anything above your neck. (Nice camera though.)
-On a related note, lose the Facebook badge.
-As for your bio/message to the reader, I have one word: Rewrite. I'm not sure what you are trying to accomplish with your site (jobs, college admissions,
etc) but I am pretty sure that this paragraph of text will not help you towards any of your goals.
-"Thats all for now...." Really? Did you get board in the middle of working on your site and decide....
-Lose the admin access
page. If you really need it make a teeny-tiny link at the bottom of your About Me. I'm talking 6pt, grey colored text here.
-Either make a contact
page and remove your email from the front
page or add your email to the bottom of every
page. If a visitor doesn't scroll down the
page when first they arrive at your site, they might never know that the
address is there and they might not spend the time to try and figure it out. Make it obvious how to reach you.
-I would include in what city/state you are located at some
point on the site.
-One little nit-pick: The space between the bottom of the text for the
page title and the
page content is the same on all of the pages of your site except for "About Me" where it is smaller due to your placement of your
headshot. This doesn't look at good as it could.
While I may not have made it out to seem this way, you are on
track to a pretty decent site. As I have told several other people who posted about their sited on CB, the litter things really matter. Bad proof reading and little
layout issues can really subtract from the overall experience if you let them. Don't.