First - Welcome to CB! Hopefully you'll become addicted and will stick around and join in the conversations! Stop by the New Member board to formally introduce yourself there.
Second - Can you maybe repost this as an attachment, preferably as a PDF? Formatting is a huge part of the resume, possibly more important than the content itself, and (unless I'm missing something) I don't see a way to actually see what that will look like on a
page. You'll get much better
feedback if you post it as a PDF.
Second (and a half) - You're omitting the name of your high school, but you'll keep your phone, home
address, and email on there? Well.... it's your info!
Just double check that to make sure that's actually what you wanted to post.
Third - On to the resume! Starting from the top, good job getting your name big and right up there with your contact info right there. I would probably add a
line in between those saying "Theatrical Electrician" or "
Lighting Designer" or whatever you want to be so they know what they're looking for when they
pick up the resume. Generally on
theatre resumes, you don't often see the Objectives section like you do with normal resumes. I'd put my show experience at the top, then add a section under that for "Relevant Skills" - things such as experienced with
counterweight rigging operations, follow spot experience, moving light repair skills, and so on.
For the Experience section, I usually like to see the information clearly laid out in columns. My resume goes, stretched across the whole
page from left to right, my position on the show, name of the show, company/
producer/
theatre, and the year I did it. As I read your resume, it's more important to me to see that you were a Follow Spot Operator (not Spotlight operator - there's a difference) than to see that you worked on a specific show. But that information is hidden in parentheses, which generally means less important information. Also, I have no idea what "2 years" (should be "two years") means.
I'm not sure how I feel about the lists of things you did for each show. For most shows on theatrical resumes, just the position is enough - everyone knows what an ASM does. But in a high school setting, it might be appropriate. I don't know, I'll wait for someone else to talk about that. But just know that in a few years as you start to get more credits, those will probably want to go away. Make sure you're using impeccable grammar and spelling here, including proper industry terminology. Things like "lighting
console" versus "board" (maybe specify which one?), "follow spot" instead of "spotlight," "Set up" in this context not "setup," and so on. And I'm not sure what you mean by "oiled and worked with
soft goods and battens" - if you're gonna be dumping oil on my
soft goods, I don't want you anywhere near my
theatre!
Education looks pretty good, I like the addition of extra stuff. Just change "will graduate in 2012" to "Expected Graduation: June 2012" or something. Others may disagree, but that's my opinion. References are removed, but I like to see three on there, with name, job title, company, phone, and email.
Well there's a few things to ponder. Keep in mind that everything here should be taken with a grain of salt. Almost all of this is purely my opinions - there's no "right" and "wrong" way to do it. People will directly contradict eachother, and that's normal. Just read every piece of advice and decide whether you want to make that change or not. Post up a properly formatted version and I'm sure people will have more.
To me, 
